read counterclockwise from noon, outside first
Gaze in here
Will do me no harm..................And seek to find
To show outward grace..................................The glint of cheer
Shows public charm...................here is the source...........the thoughts of mind
This sheltering face...........................of all joy and of all fear.......................keen you must be
But depth, you lack..........................but God alone knows.....................if through this vent
You know my name.................the secrets kept here..........you are able to see
that smiles back.................................................thought and intent
This is the frame..........................throughout the chat
To find if I am weak.....a clue you seek
my gaze you look at
2 comments:
so...i was reading this so intently, trying to make sure i got the meaning of the poem, and that i was reading it in the direction to get the full effect, and randomly wondered at the end, "hmm, i wonder why he chose these colors?" it wasn't til i was scrolling away that the structure caught my and i nearly said out loud "oh, it's an eye! i get it!" i blame the human event for manipulating my brain.
anyway, you're a good writer. don't stop.
That was really good and creative.
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